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How to Answer the Diversity (and Other Related) Supplemental Essay Prompts 2023-2024

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After the 2023 SCOTUS decision to ban race-conscious admission was released, many colleges and universities changed their supplemental essay prompts to point pretty directly at diversity in some way. Variations include mentions of identity, race, cultural background, or the importance of inclusivity.

Here’s a running list of colleges that changed their prompts.

FAQ: Do I have to write this essay?

It depends: most of the new supplemental essay prompts are optional, and students are often given the choice between a prompt related to diversity/inclusion or writing about something else altogether. (Side note that in general we recommend writing most optional prompts—they offer another chance to help a college see who you are and how you might fit at their school.)

This guide will walk you through how to answer some of the most common new supplemental essay prompts of this type, including a practical exercise to help you brainstorm essay topics. 

Let’s dive in.

 
 

What do colleges mean when referring to diversity—is it only about race?

In short, no. Diversity isn’t just about race. 

Think about diversity in a broad sense, as an invitation to talk about all the ways that a) you’re different from other students applying, and b) you’ll be able to contribute to a college community.

For great examples of essays that define “difference” in ways that aren’t related to race, check out examples 2 and 3 on the “How are you different?” prompt.

How do you brainstorm different ways that you add to a campus’ diversity? 

For the past several years, we’ve been using the following exercise to help students learn about (and express) how they’re different and how they’ll contribute. 

A comprehensive brainstorming exercise to help you generate essay ideas

The “If You Really, Really Knew Me” Exercise 
Time: 25 min. (or more, if you’re inspired)

How it works: Make a copy of this exercise template and answer all the questions. Once you’re done, you’ll have a whole bunch of potential essay ideas. 

How do all those ideas turn into an essay? 
It depends on the prompt. Let’s look at some of the new supplemental essay questions, starting with…

The “How will you contribute [based on your background/experiences/identities]?” prompt

This was, by far, the most popular new prompt released or added in 2023. Here are a couple examples of what it looks like in the wild:

  • A defining element of the Babson experience is learning and thriving in an equitable and inclusive community with a wide range of perspectives and interests. Please share something about your background, lived experiences, or viewpoint(s) that speaks to how you will contribute to and learn from Babson's collaborative community. 

  • Harvard has long recognized the importance of enrolling a diverse student body. How will the life experiences that shape who you are today enable you to contribute to Harvard?

How do you write this essay? Three steps: 

Step 1: Brainstorm (all about you).

Do the “If You Really, Really Knew Me” Exercise. Yup, the same one mentioned above.

Step 2: Research the college (learn all about them).

Make a copy of the “Why us” Essay Chart 2.0, research the school you’re writing your essay for, and fill in the first two columns. 

Once you’ve done these exercises, you’ll have a better sense of: 

  1. YOU: A bunch of different talents/skills/identities/qualities that you’ll bring to a college campus, and

  2. THEM: A variety of programs/courses/clubs/affinity groups that your college offers.

Step 3: Connect you… to them (i.e., the college you’re applying to). 

Make connections between what the school offers and what you’re interested in.

For example: 

  1. ME: I’m interested in creating original works of theater… 

  2. THEM: …Northwestern has a student theater group called Vertigo Productions that according to this article “is dedicated to providing solely original work, with the goal of supporting student writers. Every year they host a 10 Minute Play Festival in which students write and produce their own short plays.”

Then write a sentence describing how you would specifically contribute to the specific opportunity the school offers. 

And not like this (bad version, too general): “I’d love to bring my creativity to Northwestern.”   

But more like this (better version, more specific): “I’d love to produce one of my original plays during Vertigo’s 10 Minute Play Festival—or help others produce their work—and I’d be excited to bring both my positive “yes and” vibe (that I learned from improv), as well as my characteristic directness (that I learned from my grandmother) when it comes to giving others feedback.”

Tips: 

  • Use this list of positive qualities to brainstorm 1-2 specific ways you’d contribute.

  • Make sure what you’re saying isn’t super obvious from elsewhere in your application.

  • Make sure you’re connecting a specific offering at the school to specific contributions you’d like to make.

Let’s take a look at a few example essays and see what we might be able to learn from them.

Note to Reader: I’ve elected to keep the essay analysis for each essay relatively brief, as this is a pretty long guide and I feared in-depth analyses would make it suuuuuuper long.

Example Essay #1 for the “How would you contribute?” prompt

A note on Bowdoin’s prompt: You have the option to not write this as a “how will you contribute” prompt, considering the “or an experience you have had that required you to navigate across or through difference” language. But the “you may share anything about the unique experiences and perspectives that you would bring with you to the Bowdoin campus and community” can be treated as asking a version of “how will you contribute,” and the example essay below illustrates the approach you’ll want to take with “contribute” essays in general.

Prompt: Bowdoin believes that only through building a more diverse and inclusive campus community will the College best prepare graduates to be contributing and useful citizens of the world. Every graduate of this institution should be confident in their preparation to be able to navigate through differences and in all sorts of situations. A Bowdoin education does not guarantee these skills, but it does impart a set of tools necessary to bravely enter unfamiliar conditions with the confidence to deal effectively with ambiguity. If you wish, you may share anything about the unique experiences and perspectives that you would bring with you to the Bowdoin campus and community or an experience you have had that required you to navigate across or through difference.

Example:

I believe in the power of small acts of service. After witnessing the plight of Middle Eastern migrant workers left at sunrise in desert mountains with nothing but a broom, a bottle of water, and a single meal to last the day, I felt helpless. Globalization often comes at the cost of thousands of immigrant lives, but the realization that there was little I could do to ease their anguish affected me deeply. In that moment, I found my calling as an advocate. 

Analysis: This opening illustrates what screenwriters sometimes call the Inciting Incident (i.e., the moment that started it all)—in this case, it was the moment that inspired the author to take action.

Notice how the author shares a) what they witnessed, b) how it impacted them, c) why it impacted them, and d) a statement of resolve (decision to do something about it).

Q to consider as you’re exploring your own essays: Was there a moment for you that started it all? What was your Inciting Incident, if there was one?

When I returned home, I was determined to give back to my own community. Working at the NJ Help Center has enabled me to spend a lot of time with immigrant families like mine, translating applications for housing aid and health insurance while immersing myself in stories of their escapes from war-torn countries and crippling economies. Soon, I realized how great an impact small exchanges could have.

Analysis: Here the author highlights specific actions they took as a result of what they witnessed, and again shares the impact it had on their thinking.

Note that even though this particular activity may have been mentioned in their Activities List, one of the important values of your supplemental essays is to bring to life and give context to these experiences.

Q to consider: How did your extracurricular activities impact you? Could you use your supplemental essay(s) to include details and information about your “why” that isn’t and can’t really be shown in your Activities List?

At Bowdoin, I’ll continue to work towards building a community for myself and others. By joining fEMPOWER, I can work alongside peers to directly engage with social justice issues and increase female representation on campus and beyond. Through the Muslim Student Alliance, I hope to facilitate interfaith dialogue. And as a dad jokes connoisseur who thrives on improv, I can’t wait to spread laughter and joy across campus. 

And some day, in addition to becoming a universal helping hand, I hope to become the first hijabi U.S. Ambassador to the United Nations, a journey I embarked on at Bowdoin.

Analysis: Note how this author includes specific opportunities available at Bowdoin: fEMPOWER and the Muslim Student Alliance. (I’ve bolded them above, but you don’t need to highlight these in your final submission.)

The author doesn’t just mention these on their own, however, or simply say “...and these seem great!” Instead, the author includes specific language about how they’ll engage with these opportunities and how they’ll contribute:

  • “By joining fEMPOWER, I can work alongside peers to directly engage with social justice issues and increase female representation on campus and beyond” and
  • “Through the Muslim Student Alliance, I hope to facilitate interfaith dialogue.

Example Essay #2 for the “How would you contribute?” prompt

Prompt: A hallmark of the Columbia experience is being able to learn and live in a community with a wide range of perspectives. How do you or would you learn from and contribute to diverse, collaborative communities? (200 words)

Example:

I'm a non-binary neuromarketing nerd, a Renaissance Being at heart. At Columbia, I’d found a neuromarketing club to introduce this emerging field to peers, join the Queer Alliance, cook traditional Estonian sauerkraut for my roommates at Christmas, and join the Chinese Calligraphy club to expand my repertoire and teach others the rare scripts I’ve learned.

Analysis: Many “how will you contribute” prompts ask for essentially two major components:

  • Who are you/how did you become you?
  • How will you contribute to the diversity of our campus (based on/link to the things in part 1.)?

Notice that Columbia’s prompt doesn’t directly ask for much of part 1, though, and so this student spends most of their word count focusing on great specific examples for part 2 (how they’ll contribute). Both paragraphs point to a few different aspects of identity/background, while the second paragraph below dives into really nice detail and “so what” reflection.

Most significantly, I’d draw from my experience with the Human Library Organization where I’m a book curious people read to learn about embracing stigmatized gender identities. By conducting conversations with international readers, I help ensure non-binary people are not only recognized but celebrated. At Columbia, I’d love to arrange a Human Library event on campus, empowering any minoritized students (international, of color, first generation, neurodivergent, etc.) with a platform to share and process their experiences, simultaneously giving me and others a chance to learn from them. Estonia is 99% white, so I’m particularly eager to learn from non-white students in a safe space promoting open dialogue. A mini version would also make a fun addition to the Queer Alliance’s LGBTQ+ fall mixer and contribute a new way of embracing each others’ cultural differences, ultimately fostering a more cohesive and dynamic community on campus.

Analysis: This paragraph is a great example to emulate regarding really specific details about the school and how you will engage with/through them.

Key element: Notice that every single detail about Columia has a “so what”—a specific discussion of why this is important to the student and how they want to engage. For example: “empowering any minoritized students (international, of color, first generation, neurodivergent, etc.) with a platform to share and process their experiences, simultaneously giving me and others a chance to learn from them.”

Example Essay #3 for the “How would you contribute?” prompt

Prompt: Describe how your experiences, perspectives, talents, and/or your involvement in leadership activities (at your school, job, community, or within your family) will help you to make an impact both in and out of the classroom while enrolled at UT. (maximum 40 lines, or approximately 250-300 words)

Example:

As Co-Head of Roman2Roman, a program intended to help integrate incoming ninth-graders into my school community, I have become a creative, open-minded, and empathetic leader by understanding the dynamics of communication and responsibility.  From leading bi-weekly committee meetings to pairing 135 freshmen with older mentors, coordinating with administrators, planning and orchestrating events for 350 people, and finding unique ways to involve the greater community, my role in the R2R program has equipped me with managerial skills that will be helpful in college and beyond. 

As a result of my leadership experience, I was selected to be Co-Head of The Student Service Learning Board. In this role, I organized successful food, clothing, and book drives, in addition to planning meal-packing projects for the homeless, card-design activities for veterans, and beach clean-ups to support local parks, all of which involved participants ages K-12.

Within my family’s Farm Foundation, I also assumed leadership responsibilities as I coordinated our annual Thanksgiving meal donation at the local fire station which entailed fundraising, communications, purchasing, packaging, and operations. 

Here at the 172-word point the author transitions from “what I’ve already done” to how my experience at UT-Austin might “prepare [me] to "Change the World" after [I] graduate.”

As a Longhorn, I hope to expand my leadership opportunities and make a lasting impact on the UT community. Through establishing meaningful connections among R2R members, and understanding the importance of an inclusive community, I am interested in getting involved with The Transfer Student Agency of Student Government as a way to help incoming transfer students integrate into the UT community. I’d love to participate in The McCombs Leadership Program to hone my leadership skills through retreats and workshops focusing on cooperation, communication, and contributions to society. Hunger and Homelessness Outreach would also be an ideal opportunity for me to continue my leadership and service and utilize my experiences on the SSLB and my family’s farm foundation to organize volunteer opportunities to aid members of the Austin community.

Brief analysis: Note again all the UT-Austin specifics the author includes. For fun, you can usually spot these by scanning for capital letters—these usually signify a particular program, course, professor, club, or extracurricular opportunity.

Again, note that each time the author mentions something specific about the school they connect it back to either a) how they’d benefit from, or b) how they’d contribute to each opportunity.

And here are a couple more example essays without analysis, just to illustrate slight variations in approach, but still include the “how will you contribute” elements.

Prompt: A hallmark of the Columbia experience is being able to learn and thrive in an equitable and inclusive community with a wide range of perspectives. Tell us about an aspect of your own perspective, viewpoint or lived experience that is important to you, and describe how it has shaped the way you would learn from and contribute to Columbia’s diverse and collaborative community. (200 words or fewer)*

Example:

Growing up in a family of journalists and economists, I’ve developed an inquisitive, attentive eye for my surroundings. I was raised in Rio de Janeiro and reflected daily on inequality, passing favelas and luxury condominiums on my walk to school. Reading Grandpa’s urbanism articles, I became politically aware and keen on solutions for inclusive, sustainable cities. Family dinners discussing topics from Amazonian ecospirituality to Andean civilizations fed my thirst for the unknown and taught me the value of learning through collaboration. World encyclopedia in my backpack: I set out to explore.

My passion for socio-environmental impact and volunteering led me to witness diverse realities. Families’ diets reliant on dumpsites; inflated hospital gloves as refugee kids’ only toy; 13-year-old moms in riverine communities; Amazonian indigenous shamans’ eco-rituals. Immersions exposed me to different perspectives and made me rethink my life and beliefs.

At Columbia, I’ll collaborate for fairer realities and further broaden my worldview, learning from my peers’ unique backgrounds. I’ll challenge my beliefs with intercultural dialogues at Symposium, volunteer across NYC with COO, and promote campus diversity by organizing the Brazilian Society’s cultural events and sharing my experiences in class. Columbia will be my micro-scale world to contribute to and explore. (200 words)

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Prompt: At Penn, learning and growth happen outside of the classroom, too. How will you explore the community at Penn? Consider how this community will help shape your perspective and identity, and how your identity and perspective will help shape this community. (150-200 words)

Example:

I have big feet (size 9.5 to be exact). Unfortunately, the global carbon footprint is much bigger than that. By teaming up with Green Futures Youth and PennEnvironment, I became committed to sustainable living. I realized there is no better feeling than waking up at 6am with a group of strangers and planting a patch of potatoes at your local park or holding a food drive for the community fridge. Out on the field, with everyone’s hands smeared in dirt, friendships are rooted.

At Penn, there are numerous opportunities available to students to promote sustainable living. Joining the Student Eco-Reps group, I can promote the Penn Climate and Sustainability Action Plan 3.0 that encompasses the very goals—minimizing waste, eating local, learning sustainability—I try to push for in my own community. I hope that I, alongside my fellow Quakers, can help utilize more space on campus for nature and potentially implement a geo-thermally heated campus. 

At a university where nature is prescribed (Nature Rx program), it is inevitable that UPenn will encourage me to mark my footprint in the soil, changing the environment for the better, one step at a time. 

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Getting clearer? Cool. Now let’s look at some of the other prompts you might run into… 

The “social or community issue” prompt

First, here are some examples of this prompt (underlining is mine): 

  • Boston University: Reflect on a social or community issue that deeply resonates with you. Why is it important to you, and how have you been involved in addressing or raising awareness about it?

  • Boston College: Boston College’s founding in 1863 was in response to society’s call. That call came from an immigrant community in Boston seeking a Jesuit education to foster social mobility. Still today, the University empowers its students to use their education to address society’s greatest needs. Which of today’s local or global issues is of particular concern to you and how might you use your Boston College education to address it?

Note the slight differences in these prompts, underlined above. One focuses on how you have already been involved (in high school), while the other asks you to imagine how you will be, or hope to be, involved, and how your education at the college or university you’re applying to can help you do so (but keep in mind that with prompts like the second one, it’s still useful to show how you have already been involved—you’ll just spend a lot more time showing how that school will help you to level up your involvement).

Example Essay #1 for the “social or community issue?” prompt

Prompt for Boston University: Reflect on a social or community issue that deeply resonates with you. Why is it important to you, and how have you been involved in addressing or raising awareness about it? (300 words) (Note: This essay wasn’t originally written for Boston University, but it could have worked well for it.)

Example:

The last sliver of the sun disappears over a perfect wave as I ride toward shore.

My beautiful home should have made me an idealist, but no…

I’m a pessimist. 

I was raised on science, not faith, and pessimism is a possible side effect. 

I brush my teeth, climb into bed, and think about our future rising sea levels and supervolcano eruptions. I can’t ignore the fish migrations caused by climate change that will ultimately doom my home and, eventually, our world. But, though I know the world is doomed, I love this world, and I’d do anything to prevent it from utter destruction. 

Here at the 104-word mark the author transitions from “Why is it important to you” into answering “how have you been involved in addressing or raising awareness about it?”

I joined forces with my sworn enemies, the optimists, with Heal the Bay’s Pier Aquarium and MPA watch, spreading messages of environmental protection while teaching the community about ocean creatures and monitoring wrongdoing at local beaches. 

I intensified my battle by interning with UCLA’s LCC Civil and Environmental engineering lab, which designs sustainable building materials. My project focused on the dissolution kinetics of calcite with organic ligands at high pH to simulate cementitious environments, and my results have applications for sequestering CO2.

Knowing the future doesn’t make me want to give up, instead it makes me want to test the limits of what I can accomplish. Unlike my optimistic counterparts, I have accepted what’s coming, so I’ll be ready, at least more ready than anyone else, to stop the unstoppable. 

And if I fail, what does it matter? That asteroid was totally coming anyway!

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

  • Here, the author uses their supplemental essay to give context to activities mentioned in their Activities List, sharing with us not simply the details of what they did, but why those experiences mattered to them.
  • The author also includes some “geeky language” (like “the dissolution kinetics of calcite with organic ligands at high pH to simulate cementitious environments”) which helps us see just how deep they went into it. Pro tip: If you decide to include a bit of jargon, keep it to a sentence or two—as this student does—no need to write long jargon-filled paragraphs.
  • The author also uses the ending to show another value and quality of character that’s important to him—a sense of (dark) humor.

Example Essay #2 for the “social or community issue?” prompt

The essay below was originally written for an old prompt from Barnard (FYI: Here’s the guide to the current Barnard essays), but it could easily be adapted to work for the Boston College prompt above, which reads “Which of today’s local or global issues is of particular concern to you and how might you use your… education to address it?”

Example:

I am interested in questions surrounding gender justice and sexual violence, specifically their intersection with economics and politics. 

At Barnard, I hope to ask difficult questions surrounding women, labor, and safety. Specifically, I hope to research sexual violence, enrolling in Professor Tolonen’s class ECON 3063, “Women in Development Economics.” By joining this class, I will ask: In what ways are the impacts of sexual violence gender-specific? Do such experiences have an impact on the way women’s economic roles are viewed in society? I would also like to lean into the legal implications of sexual violence cases. By taking the colloquium on “Law and Violence,” I could learn about instances where the law warrants different forms of violence. What makes violence permissible in these cases? What are the methods that inform these legal determinations? I believe I can start to answer these important questions as a student at Barnard College. 

At Barnard, I also hope to learn about poverty and labor. In high school I started “BISC Comes Forward,” a social media campaign that revealed inequalities faced by janitorial staff. This campaign underlined the poverty experienced by working women. I questioned why the government fails to intervene in helping widowers with children who are living under the poverty line. As I major in Economics and Politics at Barnard, I will explore these intersections between class and gender. Through BC3019: “Labor Economics,” I hope to study various labor theories to understand the government's lack of intervention in cases of earnings gaps.   

From a young age, my mother taught me to be an independent thinker. When I was young my questions were small. As I grew up my questions only got bigger. At Barnard, I can ask these big questions, hopefully finding significant answers along the way.

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

  • Note that the first two sentences of the essay address the first part of the prompt: “Which of today’s local or global issues is of particular concern to you…?” and the tone here is clear and direct, which works very well.
  • Next, the author dives right into the specifics of how they would use their education to address these issues, citing specific courses they would take.
  • And notice how each time the author mentions a specific course or opportunity, they connect back to something specific they hope to learn, or a way they hope to grow. You can do this too—in fact, I’d encourage it.

The “experience/conversation with someone who is different from you” prompt

Examples of this prompt type include (again, underlining is mine): 

  • Vanderbilt University values learning through contrasting points of view. We understand that our differences, and our respect for alternative views and voices, are our greatest source of strength. Please reflect on conversations you’ve had with people who have expressed viewpoints different from your own. How did these conversations/experiences influence you?

  • Claremont McKenna College: A critical part of fulfilling our mission is living out the commitments of CMC’s Open Academy: Freedom of Expression, Viewpoint Diversity, and Constructive Dialogue. We want to learn more about your commitment to listening and learning from others with different viewpoints, perspectives, and life experiences from your own. Describe a time when engaging with someone about a specific topic resulted in you changing your attitude, belief, or behavior, or you changed the belief or behavior of someone else. What was the change that occurred for you, and what facilitated that change? What did you learn from that experience, and how has it informed how you engage with others? 

Note that while there’s a lot of overlap between prompts of this type, there can be subtle differences. For example, both focus on engaging with people with different viewpoints, but for the first prompt above, you don’t need to address at all whether you or the other person changed your/their mind in some way. But for the second prompt, you’re being directly asked about how you or they changed, and also specifically about how the engagement informed how you engage with others (note that you could talk about that in regard to the first prompt as well, but “how did these conversations/experiences influence you?” is more open-ended).

Keep in mind that, in general for prompts like these, it’s not really about being right or wrong—your goal is to show that you can engage in productive dialogue around complex topics. Because you’re going to need to do that a lot in college.

But good news—you can probably write one essay that answers both prompts, assuming you’re applying to two schools with similar prompts. 

Here are a couple sample essay for this type of prompt—see analysis below for more:

Example Essay #1 for the “experience/conversation with someone who is different from you” prompt

Example:

A racist culture pervades my small town of Maryville, Tennessee. To outsiders, we seem complicit in this racism through our mascot: the Rebels. In August, my school voted me as Mrs. MHS: awarded to the student who contributes the most to the school and community through extracurriculars, academics, and community service and embodies the “Rebel spirit.” I was grateful for the award, but appalled when the latter label was bestowed upon me. So, the girl who embodied the Rebel spirit rebelled.

“Whether you like it or not, our mascot has foundations in racism. Changing the mascot is the bare minimum that we owe to the students that have been affected by the racism this mascot fuels,” began my (now infamous) social media post.

My post was reposted, sent in groups, and met with intense hatred. 

“The snowflakes won’t let us have anything these days. It’s literally a mascot,” read the most popular comment, insinuating that I was being overly sensitive. The student who wrote this, leader of a group called “Save the Rebels,” ensured that I was alienated as one of the few local supporters. 

I messaged him and transformed an argumentative discourse into a healthy, multiple-day discussion about the roots and depiction of the mascot. We researched each other’s sources and began to understand the opposing side’s perspective. Yet, as we made progress, his friends pulled him away from breaking the barriers of polarization with me. 

Incorporating the lessons I learned from this experience into future dialogues, I believe it would be increasingly impactful for the defenders of the mascot to hear the testimonials of students of color to substantiate my claim that the mascot brought about pain. I would also want to create a safe space where individuals can exchange differing perspectives and attempt to understand each other’s position without fear of social pressure.

At [name of school], I hope to contribute to an environment free of judgment, where I can use the tools that I’ve gained to pave the way for a more effective, respectful dialogue.

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

The structure used here is one you can learn from, and follows this simple format:

  1. Set up the Inciting Incident (i.e., moment that started it all) in the first paragraph, or as succinctly as you can.
  2. Share what you did about it, perhaps including (as this author does) what the response was.
  3. Finally, share what you learned from the engagement.
  4. In the end, the author didn’t find a perfect or happy ending—and that can be totally fine. That happens all the time in life. But you still get a sense of what they’ll bring to a college campus and how they’ll engage with difference, which is the point of this essay.

Note that the essay above wouldn’t quite work for the second prompt, since the story doesn’t fit the “Describe a time when engaging with someone about a specific topic resulted in you changing your attitude, belief, or behavior, or you changed the belief or behavior of someone else” aspect. Why? They started to engage, but neither actually changed.

But the final paragraphs can work to some degree for the part of the prompt that reads: “What did you learn from that experience, and how has it informed how you engage with others?”—though ideally they’d address ways they’ve already changed and not just how they hope to engage with others.

If this essay were responding to a prompt that asks about “how has it informed how you engage…”, I’d encourage the author to include a few details about work they’ve already done and how they’ve already changed… before including the part about how they hope to be different going forward.

Example Essay #2 for the “experience/conversation with someone who is different from you” prompt

Example:

I probably argue with my grandfather more than I do with most other people combined. It’s not because we’re at odds. We just have different perspectives, influenced by our experiences—his as a life-long resident of India, mine as a first-generation American. 

One pretty common argument we have is over Eastern vs. Western medicine. My solution to a headache, for example, is to take Advil. His is to rub Tiger Balm on his forehead and coconut oil on the soles of his feet. I try to convince him of the benefits of taking a nonsteroidal anti-inflammatory, describing how it can reduce inflammation by blocking the production of certain chemicals. He tries to convince me that the balm creates a cooling effect, distracting the brain from pain and relaxing the muscles. Rather than becoming sore at or resentful of each other, we’ve grown closer through these debates, and I’ve learned how to disagree without letting the situation get acrimonious.

Through these interactions, I’ve learned that a discussion shouldn’t be confrontational. The purpose isn’t to win, but to share my knowledge with the other party and learn from them as well. So rather than saying, “Rubbing balm on your forehead is stupid; you should just take Advil,” I say, “While rubbing balm on your forehead seems to work, I’ve noticed that taking an Advil has a stronger and more immediate effect.” Respecting the opposing party makes them more willing to hear you out. 

I’ve also learned there’s a fine line between logic and emotion. I try not to take personally the things my grandfather says in an argument. Just because he doesn’t think taking Advil is the better solution doesn’t mean he thinks I’m stupid. If I take it that way, we begin to move away from what the argument really was about—the facts.

I’ll continue to apply these learnings in discussions and debates I have with others, realizing that having a “successful argument” isn’t about winning. It’s about sharing my opinion and learning from theirs, expanding our perspectives without alienating each other.

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

As with the example essay above, the structure is straightforward, one you could potentially use, and slightly different from the other example:

  • In the first paragraph, the author succinctly describes the person with whom they disagree, and is careful to demonstrate understanding and perspective by saying, “We just have different perspectives, influenced by our experiences.”
  • Next, the author gets into some specifics. Notice that, here, the author isn’t describing a single example but a variety of examples—either approach can work, depending on the specific phrasing of the prompt you’re working on.
  • The author transitions into specific lessons they’ve learned:
    • “I’ve learned how to disagree without letting the situation get acrimonious.”
    • “I’ve learned that a discussion shouldn’t be confrontational.”
    • “I’ve also learned there’s a fine line between logic and emotion.”
  • And the author expands briefly, in each case, on what each lesson means or why the lesson is important to them (e.g., “Respecting the opposing party makes them more willing to hear you out.”)

This essay—in particular the ending—does a nice job describing how these experiences informed how the author will engage with others, and as an admission officer I’d have a pretty clear sense of the kind of person they’d be in a college classroom.

Here’s another prompt you might encounter:

The “How are you different?” prompt

Examples of this prompt include: 

  • Duke University: “We believe a wide range of personal perspectives, beliefs, and lived experiences are essential to making Duke a vibrant and meaningful living and learning community. Feel free to share with us anything in this context that might help us better understand you and what you might bring to our community.”

  • Dartmouth College:  “ ‘It’s not easy being green…’ was the frequent refrain of Kermit the Frog. How has difference been a part of your life, and how have you embraced it as part of your identity and outlook?”

Note that, as we mentioned above regarding diversity, “difference” can mean a lot of different things. 

Check out the examples and analyses below to see a few different approaches to this type of prompt.

Example Essay #1 for the “How are you different?” prompt

Example:

As a light-skinned, soft-spoken, empathetic, and analytical Black woman, a lot of times I have felt that I am not a part of my own community. Many of my family members ask me why I relate so much to the East Asian community and culture. This, of course, has led me to question whether or not community is only skin deep.     

I became engrossed in the East Asian community at a young age. My dad, an international pilot, often brought movies home from China. One day he brought home Spirited Away by Hayao Miyazaki. He described it as something similar to Alice in Wonderland. I could truly see myself in the Miyazaki’s heroines: from how they transcended their roles in life to how they met obstacles with resilience and bravery, these heroines helped me feel less alone. 

I evolved from watching Miyazaki movies to joining anime clubs, to reading East Asian philosophy, and eventually studying the works of Japanese author Haruki Murakami. This culminated in a trip to Japan last summer as a People to People: Student Ambassador. Immersed in the culture, I visited a Japanese high school, hiked Mt. Fuji, soaked in an onsen, and experienced a deep connection with my homestay family, the Mishimas.  

Through being a part of the East Asian community, I have explored answers to metaphysical questions, prayed at a Shinto shrine, and realized that community is a state of mind, much more than skin deep. 

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

This essay could work well for either of the sample prompts listed above, as well as others.

Note the clear, straightforward structure—one that you could potentially use if answering this prompt:

  • In the first paragraph, the author defines the “difference”—this is great because it allows her to use the rest of the word budget to explore the “so what” and what it means to her. She also raises a compelling question at the start: Is community only skin deep?* In the next paragraph, the author shares specific details that show us two important things about what she’d contribute to a college campus:
    • Values she’s gained from the characters she’s connected with (“resilience and bravery”)
    • How these values have shaped her (“these heroines helped me feel less alone”)

If you’re writing for this type of prompt, consider answering these two questions:

  • What values has your difference (however you define it) helped you develop?
  • How have these values shaped you? In short, answer “so what?”

If possible, and with the word limit remaining, continue answering “so what,” as this author does.

Important note: Even though the essay above describes a racial and cultural difference, your “how I’m different” essay does not need to be about race.

Example Essay #2 for the “How are you different?” prompt

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Main hobby is ride shirtless on horseback through heart of prosperous land of great mother Russia while contemplating strategy to hack next presidential election of puny United States.

This is not in fact a hobby of mine, but it is most certainly a treasured experience of one of my many alternate personalities: Vladimir Putin. 

Impressions are my art form. But impressions are not just a hobby, they let me understand the roles I play in my life.

Sometimes I’m a nerd. Or an environmentalist. Or a Star Wars fanboy. Or even a surfer dude. 

One of my favorite roles is two-sport varsity athlete.

During my sophomore year, I received baseball Honorable Mention All-League and Rookie of the Year awards, and our team missed a CIF championship by two runs. Junior year was my chance to help my team break school history. But a bad hop-induced broken finger in the game before playoffs ruined that chance. 

So I changed my game plan. I talked to our coach about my helping to manage the team. I traded my glove and bat for a clipboard and pencil, keeping score and tracking pitch counts; I used the data to alter defensive formations based on opponents’ batting tendencies and advise on pitching strategy, allowing us to conserve our ace for the championship. I applied my problem solving skills and led my team from the dugout; our team broke school history for the second year in a row, making it to the CIF championship, falling two runs short of victory. 

My impressions have let me not just enjoy my inner semi-dictator with a thick Russian accent, but explore and embrace new parts of my identity. Many people are confined by one-dimensional versions of themselves: I’m a lawyer, I’m an athlete, I’m Batman. In reality, people are so much more complex. Understanding that fact when I broke my finger and could no longer be the “two-sport varsity athlete” allowed me to adapt, to become the honorary coach and contribute to my team. My life is truly one big series of impressions. 

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

  • Again, note that “differences” need not be only about race—we get a lot of interesting detail that shows us who this student will be / what they bring to a community without any mention of race here.
  • Just as the previous author did, this author points to specific values that their difference(s) have helped them develop, including the ability to adapt (to a new role), lead (as honorary coach), and contribute.
  • One thing that helps this essay stand out is the clever opening—you might consider writing a creative hook to grab the reader’s attention.

And, just to show you that this can go a number of different ways, here’s…

Example Essay #3 for the “How are you different?” prompt

Note: The next essay on “impressions” and the one below it on “construction” were both written for the UC prompt #8, which asks about what else makes you stand out as an applicant, but could have worked for the prompts above and many others.

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Five years ago I took up a job in construction from a couple of neighbors who needed help doing a demolition job on an old house. I saw this as an opportunity to help pay bills around the house as well as cover my own personal expenses. I did a good enough job that my neighbors told me that, if I wanted, I could continue working with them. 

It has been a demanding job and I made numerous mistakes at first, like using the wrong tools for different tasks or the wrong size screw. On occasion, I was scolded for my mistakes and I felt incompetent, as I wasn’t able to complete tasks as fast as my co-workers. There were even days that I considered quitting, but I stuck with it. 

 Since then, I've built, repaired, and remodeled numerous homes for family, friends, neighbors, and even strangers. I’ve removed and replaced carpets; broken down walls as well as driveways; installed cabinets, lights, both wood and tile flooring; and painted room after room. 

Working in construction has made me feel like a bigger part of society, because I’m shaping the buildings and offices my community uses. Although I don’t make the choices in design, my workmanship is reflected in every job I’ve done. Because of this, my most memorable projects are those that I’ve taken on by myself.

It has been a personally fulfilling experience—there’s just something about peeling away the last strip of tape off a new floor that’s indescribable—and getting to see hours of planning, preparation, and work come together is such a rewarding experience. The best part? Knowing that some family will get to enjoy my work.

But this is not what I will do the rest of my life. 

There are other ways I can help cover my family’s expenses, and getting a degree is the next step. In fact, I have a feeling that would be an even more fulfilling journey.

Brief Analysis + What You Can Learn from This Essay:

Sometimes students ask us, “Is it okay to write about a work experience?” The answer is: Absolutely. In fact, it could be the thing that sets you apart.

Again—and I know I sound like a broken record here—it’s essential to let the reader know what values this experience has helped you develop, as this author did:

  • Par 1: Commitment to supporting the family (colleges love to hear about this!) and create autonomy (cover their own personal expenses)
  • Par 2: Ability to persevere (even after being criticized)
  • Par 3: Ability to adapt to and learn to tackle many different kinds of jobs (see list of responsibilities they’ve taken on)
  • Par 4 and 5: The author answers “so what” (being a bigger part of society, feeling a pride in and ownership of their work)
  • Ending: The biggest “so what” is the knowledge that there is more for them to do and learn—in college and beyond. (Side note: This author attended Stanford for both undergrad and for their Masters in Engineering—just in case you were wondering whether essays like this work for selective colleges.)

Note: This student doesn’t describe in an in-depth way what they’ll contribute to a college campus (see Duke prompt above), but remember that this was written for a “how are you different?” prompt. If the prompt were asking about how a student might contribute to the campus community, however, the author could have easily added some specifics related to how they’d contribute, as needed.

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