Applying to Stanford? Great! The Stanford Roommate Essay can serve as a great way to introduce yourself to your future roomie (and, obviously, admissions officers) and vice versa. So we hope you enjoy and learn from these examples and tips below on writing the Roommate Essay.
Just to state the obvious, this is not the ONLY way to write your Stanford (or any) Roommate Essay, but it is a GOOD way, we’ve seen it work for lots of students, and it’s based on an essay that we think is GREAT. First, read that example essay, then we’ll talk about why it’s great and how she did it.
And for what it’s worth, she did get into Stanford. So they liked something about it, too.
Stanford Roommate Essay Prompt:
Virtually all of Stanford’s undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate-and us-know you better.
A great example essay:
Everybody has peculiarities that most people don’t know about. For example, I have a habit of pinching ear lobes. I also pour milk into my cereal, only to drain it out after soaking the cereal for a bit. Is that strange? Well, there’s more:
I have -2.75 vision but I hate wearing glasses because I feel confined and limited in my freedom to think. So you’ll see me squint quite often, trying to overcome my astigmatism–it’s not a death glare, I promise.
I’m also extremely tactile. I like to run my fingers over laser printing because I am amazed by my fingers’ ability to detect subtle impressions. This is why I hate wearing socks on carpet: my feet lose sensitivity. So I hope you don’t mind bare feet.
I have a fetish for things that smell nice, so I like to bury myself under fresh laundry just wheeled back from laundry room 8 (the one closest to our unit). I also alternate between three different shampoos just for the smell of it. So don’t be surprised if I ask to share our toiletry items; I’m just looking for variety.
Driving calms my nerves. Sometimes, my family and I go on midnight highway cruises during which we discuss weighty issues such as the reason people in our society can so adamantly advertise items like Snuggies. So I apologize if I keep you up late at night asking you to ponder the complex mysteries of our world.
Also, in my home, we have an open door policy–literally. Every door, excluding those of an occupied bathroom and the fridge, is always open. I hope you and I will be comfortable enough with each other–and with those around us–that we feel no need to hide behind bedroom doors.
Finally, I love shelves. They organize many different items under a unified structure and I find value in this kind of integrated diversity. And I love them as a metaphor: there is a place for everything, including even the quirkiest of our traits. That’s why no one should feel left out no matter how strange or odd they might think they are.
So, what are you like?
Why we like this essay so much:
I learn so much about the writer. I learn (in order, by paragraph) that she:
- is confident enough to admit she’s a little weird
- values her freedom to think
- is observant and sensitive to life’s small details
- is great with wordplay
- is ironic and self-deprecating even while pondering life’s mysteries
- is willing to be emotionally open
- values making order from chaos (AND she’s smart enough to write an essay that actually creates order out of chaos–so her form matches her content, which is kinda next level)
How she wrote this essay:
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She began with chaos. She brainstormed a list of 21 random details about herself using this 21 details brainstorming exercise.
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Then she created order. She organized the details into paragraphs by theme. She found, in other words, a way to connect the random facts–to put them on different “shelves” (each “shelf” = one paragraph).
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Once she understood what she was doing, she cut some of the details that were less-revealing or extraneous and replaced them with better details that were more synecdochic. What’s a synecdoche? When a small part represents the whole. Kinda’ like an essence object.
Remember: I’m not saying this is the only way to write your roommate essay, but it’s a pretty good way.
And if you want to get into Stanford, your roommate essay—like your main Common App essay—should demonstrate these three things:
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Are you an interesting and intelligent person?
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Will you bring something of value to the campus?
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Can you write?
This student showed all three of those things and, yes, she got into Stanford.
(That along with her 2300 SAT and perfect grades. Plus she was first generation. #BTW.)
If you’ve already written a draft, read Part 2 of this post for a way to improve it.
Or just read Part 2 below because it’s smart, funny and well-written–like your essay will be. #thankmygrandmaformyconfidence
Want to learn how to answer the short answer questions for many of the most selective colleges? Check out that guide.
How to write (or strengthen) your Stanford roommate essay
Here’s one way to improve your Stanford (or any) roommate essay if you’ve already written a draft:
Step 1. Count how many details in your essay reveal something deep and true about you. (I count 14 good details in the example essay in Part 1 of this post.)
But which details reveal something deep and true? And what does a “deep and true” detail sound like? You decide.
Take a look at these details:
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I don’t snore in my sleep.
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I spent last summer at West Point and Annapolis, where I was told I’d be admitted if I applied. I decided not to so I could spend more time with my family.
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I went to an LA Galaxy game with my friends two weeks ago.
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I competed in rodeos for three years.
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I love Justin Timberlake, NCIS, The Walking Dead, Avatar, and The Voice.
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I have always been the girl who does the most push-ups, pull-ups, and sit-ups, but that’s probably because I’m usually the tiniest girl and have the least weight to deal with.
Which would you keep? Which could be cut?
Ultimately it’s a matter of personal preference, but here are two tips:
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Notice when two or three details are communicating the same thing. Example: “Running relaxes me” and “I’m on the track team” aren’t clearly different. Cut one.
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Specificity usually wins. Example: “I have a wide collection of crystals, American coins predating the 1940’s, and ammonite fossils in my closet” is better than “I collect things.”
And two personal preferences:
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Keep pop culture references to a minimum. One or two is okay. Five is, I think, too many. Mix it up with some old school or classic stuff. Example: Jay-Z and Al Green (or) Wreck-it Ralph and Fellini’s 8 ½.
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Maybe don’t use exclamation points more than twice. Unless you’re being ironic.
Now look back at your own essay. Which are the good (keeper) details and which are kind of weak? Cut the weak ones. So much about you is interesting and beautiful and different. Don’t settle for boring details in this essay. Or in any essay. Or in life.
Step 2. Once you’ve identified your specific, unique details, decide if you want to include MORE details and LESS explanation or the opposite.
Example of MORE details and LESS explanation:
In my room, a Korean ballad streams from American-made computer speakers, while a cold December wind wafts the smells of ramen and leftover pizza. On the wall in the far back, a Korean flag hangs besides a Led Zeppelin poster.
The author’s point is pretty clear, and though he doesn’t need to explain it, he does later:
…This mélange of cultures in my East-meets-West room embodies the diversity that characterizes my international student life.”
Those details could stand on their own, though, and the “show” requires little “tell.”
Example of FEWER details and MORE explanation:
I love playing piano. I play it when I volunteer at the hospital, in senior resident homes, and at my Church. Every time, after I play at the designated location, both the elderly and the children smile contentedly, emanating a happiness that I have never seen elsewhere-a joy that everyone should be able to experience.
Which do you prefer? Again, it’s a matter of personal preference.
For my money, though, “show” is greater than “tell” for this kind of essay.
And most personal essays.
And life.
More Strong Stanford Roommate Examples
Here are two more solid example essays, to show different options for strong approaches to writing this essay. (The first student attended Cornell ED; The second attended Stanford.)
Example Roommate Essay
Hello (no, too formal)
Can’t wait to live together (just weird)
Howdy (…what am I, a cowboy?)
Wassup dude (somehow worse than all three, but gotta start somewhere)
Lemme preface this by saying I stink at conversational writing, coming off as either dull or cringy, depending on whether I attempt to make a joke, such attempts creating the latter tone. I don’t know, I’ve been told I’m a funny person… I guess something’s different about face-to-face communication.
Anyways, I’ll do my best to answer the question surely on your mind before we share a room. Who’s this Oscar kid?
Humor is a large part of my life—you’ll often see me watching bits from comedians like Larry David, Seth McFarlane, or Jordan Peele. Laughter is like medication for me. When I am under stress, comedy provides perspective, poking fun at the weird, unsettling, and stupid parts of life (coincidentally, the parts I often get most anxious about).
I love the outdoors, and I’ll often leave the room to go on walks. I’m also somewhat of a gym rat. I apologize in advance for the various Stanford shirts that I likely tried (unsuccessfully) to make into cutoff tank tops and scattered vitamin supplements. Feel free to help yourself to any, except the whey protein… jk.
Although I couldn’t carry a tune to save my life, I’m a music enthusiast. Fair warning, I’ll text you songs on a regular basis once I learn your music tastes.
Farewell, partner (I’m a cowboy now)
Oscar
Example Roommate Essay
Hi roomie!
Ever wonder how many versions of yourself exist in people’s minds? My take—there’s an infinite number, and I hope you get to meet infinity+1 versions of me.
Here’s a head start:
One version of me is extroverted, moving excitedly from topic to topic in social situations. Another’s introverted, preferring warm, solitary nights curled up with a book at home. Together, they form my ideal studying environment: a cozy cafe, surrounded by iced coffee and friends. Maybe we can recreate this at Coupa Cafe, adding your unique study habits as we tackle freshman year. Will you be the matcha to my iced latte?
There’s also adventurous me, always up for a roller coaster or bungee jumping. I’m hoping we’ll have quite a few Great America weekend trips.
All versions are made instantly happier with a breath of fresh air, through brisk walks or long bike rides. I can’t wait to represent Redmond—bike capital of the PNW—while exploring Palo Alto’s trails together.
There’s “listener Ananya”—endlessly curious about your day and interests. I hope I’ll become someone you feel comfortable talking to during midday hangouts at Meyer Green or into the wee hours.
And without fail, you’ll see goodnight-ritual Ananya: each night, I say goodnight to my friends and family, starting with my best friend in DC and my sister in St. Louis, ending with my parents and Alexa. As you replace Alexa as the last “person” I say goodnight to, I hope this Ananya becomes your favorite version.
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